AND its
A *stabbing* pain that says I lack
the common sense and confidence
to *bring an end* to promises
that *I make in times of desperate conversation*.
*Hoping my night could be better than this in the end.*
(Just say when)

thats just sad…

and its “but we’ve gambeled with desire” by putting we, its also grammaticly incorrect

AND, its “call me a name, kill me with words”

and this next one is just sad. it’s;

I hope the air will *server* to remind you
*that my heart is as cold*.
*as the clouds of your breath*
and my words are as *timed*
as the beating in my chest.

so if you’re going to duplicate someone elses work, have the decency to make it right, not massacre it.